My essay has many issues.  The biggest problem is that I compare too many tv shows and movies that cannot be compared.  I compare spongebob to movies like The Hangover and shows like The Office.  My initial point was to describe the change in media over the years and it's influence on my life but I actually just described my change in interests.  Just because my interests change does not mean that the media is influencing my life.  Although I believe that the media speeds up the process of my loss of innocence, I need to make it clear that the media influenced ME in this way rather than everyone else.

I should focus more on how Pokemon, Spongebob and The Office influence MY life rather than how the media is changing the world.  This essay is supposed to be about me, myself and I. Not the rest of the world.